I like this vn. It has the small tiny 5 foot human and the giant 7-8 feet musclebound canine that many other vns have, but its different since the human is one who is trying to figure out his situation and take control of it, while in other vns, the human is this helpless baby who needs to be coddled. I am looking for to what happens next.
I like that the human character is not such a helpless crybaby than in other novels but managed critical situations with a bit more calmness and fighting-spirit. Also interesting world-building in a short time. Good start.
Phenomenal game so far. I can see some a great budding story, fun and interesting characters. It reminds me of Adastra but is refreshingly new. I'm very excited to see where this lovely piece goes
I'm absolutely loving this so far. Vaast is such a likeable character. Both of the main characters are actually. I'm really looking forward to seeing what you do with the rest of the story.
Very nice start, Vaast is very likeable personality wise and a nice blend of classic wolf-man with something a little more alien and exotic. ;) I am curious to learn more abot our MC and his background. He seemed really good at coping for someone in as stressful a situation as his - perhaps another 'gift' from the doctor? Looking forward to read more with the next update.
And being Vaast's chewing toy doesn't sound all that bad. ;)
AGH!!! The art is so beautiful! Keep up the great work!
Spoiler Warning:
Will there be a flashback scene in future updates showing the process of the different specimens getting captured? I'd like to see how they evaded detection when capturing the humans.
I've finished it yesterday and it got a good start plus potential. I'm hoping the MC will continues to be likeable unlike certain isekai protagonists in other works.
Depends on what you plan to do with them, wouldn't you say?
A lot of planets out there have different strengths of gravity on them as well as different atmospheres. Wouldn't want your "new friend" to struggle breathing would you?
Quality writing with an interesting concept, I'm very excited to see what comes next! My only critique is I wish there was a little more background music or sound effects. Overall a great project and I'm eagerly awaiting the next update!!!
Solid start, I can't wait for more. You guys have a real opportunity to set a standard with this. Sadly, 1 chapter is hard to comment on for me but it all seemed tight so far.
Ooh new fvn with new MEN to gush about :>
Spoilers alert if you didn't read it btw!
1. UI / Readability
First of all, I love the story UI. However, I can't help but feel that the main menu is unfinished since its style is the default one. Will you update that UI in future builds?
Idk if visual novels do this since I don't read much, but perhaps you should introduce pauses in dialogue, especially after "," and "." since there are really long ones.
Thirdly, and it's just a minor thing but the buttons are covered in the diary page, so I have to use the mouse scroll wheel to return to the previous dialogue.
I feel like thought should be expressed better since a few lines (in the AI part) have quotations but no speaker which really confused me.
2. Plot
I can't help but feel the first scene of the VN is too inconsequential. It could ruin (allegedly) the careers of three of the most influential people in the galaxy, and they just greenlight it like that? I kind of expected some overseeing and managing to be mentioned, but Idk
I'm kinda wondering why Goober (MC) (my sense of naming is awesome) was implanted a universal translation? In hindsight they don't really benefit anything from giving a specimen a chance to expose them using their language.
3. Gushing
The setting and worldbuilding as of right now is definitely my cup of tea ("kidnapped by wolf men"), and Vaast...Ok but the size diff tho... I need him, I need him bad >.<
Repost cuz I realized I wrote on the wrong page lol
The dialogue in quotations without a speaker is meant to be intentional internal dialogue between Goober (Noah) and the AI, distinct from his internal thoughts/narrator. Is there a more intuitive way to indicate this? In contrast the rest of the spoken dialogue doesn't use quotes
The way you are currenly formatting it, I seperated the narration from MC's thoughts completely since there's "I thought" at the end of the internal monologue with the AI.
If there are 2 types of thoughts, one expressed through narration and one expressed through dialogue then I don't think there's a more intuitive way to it. I suppose a "I nearly jump as the AI responds to my thoughts." in the first interaction along with subtle reminders like "I'm still not used to the whole mind speaking thing." is ok enough.
Another thing about the formating, you could bold/italic all dialogues between MC and AI instead of quotation marks and ofc, show MC as the speaker to make it clearer, but that's just imo.
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I like this vn. It has the small tiny 5 foot human and the giant 7-8 feet musclebound canine that many other vns have, but its different since the human is one who is trying to figure out his situation and take control of it, while in other vns, the human is this helpless baby who needs to be coddled. I am looking for to what happens next.
Furry "lost in space" story that is actually good? Wow, what a rarity. Looking forward to next build!
I can't wait for the next chapter to release! It's really good so far. 😁
I like that the human character is not such a helpless crybaby than in other novels but managed critical situations with a bit more calmness and fighting-spirit. Also interesting world-building in a short time. Good start.
Phenomenal game so far. I can see some a great budding story, fun and interesting characters. It reminds me of Adastra but is refreshingly new. I'm very excited to see where this lovely piece goes
I'm absolutely loving this so far. Vaast is such a likeable character. Both of the main characters are actually. I'm really looking forward to seeing what you do with the rest of the story.
Very nice start, Vaast is very likeable personality wise and a nice blend of classic wolf-man with something a little more alien and exotic. ;) I am curious to learn more abot our MC and his background. He seemed really good at coping for someone in as stressful a situation as his - perhaps another 'gift' from the doctor? Looking forward to read more with the next update.
And being Vaast's chewing toy doesn't sound all that bad. ;)
when is the next chapter or update? it was good i liked i.
We are hoping to release the next chapter sometime within the next few months.
Wonderful start of a visual novel.
We are glad you liked it
AGH!!! The art is so beautiful! Keep up the great work!
Spoiler Warning:
Will there be a flashback scene in future updates showing the process of the different specimens getting captured? I'd like to see how they evaded detection when capturing the humans.
Stick around and you might just find out :3
I've finished it yesterday and it got a good start plus potential. I'm hoping the MC will continues to be likeable unlike certain isekai protagonists in other works.
Let's see what happens in Chapter 2!
Feels good that Noah is liked :3
Depends on what you plan to do with them, wouldn't you say?
A lot of planets out there have different strengths of gravity on them as well as different atmospheres. Wouldn't want your "new friend" to struggle breathing would you?
I'm very excited for this for what comes next! :3
Quality writing with an interesting concept, I'm very excited to see what comes next! My only critique is I wish there was a little more background music or sound effects. Overall a great project and I'm eagerly awaiting the next update!!!
do you plan to add NSFW content in the future?
i mean there is adult tag, so there is a chance
Yes, this VN is NSFW. There is a setting to turn it on/off too.
Solid start, I can't wait for more. You guys have a real opportunity to set a standard with this. Sadly, 1 chapter is hard to comment on for me but it all seemed tight so far.
3 years in a cell sound like a good deal to me
Ooh new fvn with new MEN to gush about :> Spoilers alert if you didn't read it btw!
1. UI / Readability
First of all, I love the story UI. However, I can't help but feel that the main menu is unfinished since its style is the default one. Will you update that UI in future builds?
Idk if visual novels do this since I don't read much, but perhaps you should introduce pauses in dialogue, especially after "," and "." since there are really long ones.
Thirdly, and it's just a minor thing but the buttons are covered in the diary page, so I have to use the mouse scroll wheel to return to the previous dialogue.
I feel like thought should be expressed better since a few lines (in the AI part) have quotations but no speaker which really confused me.
2. Plot
I can't help but feel the first scene of the VN is too inconsequential. It could ruin (allegedly) the careers of three of the most influential people in the galaxy, and they just greenlight it like that? I kind of expected some overseeing and managing to be mentioned, but Idk
I'm kinda wondering why Goober (MC) (my sense of naming is awesome) was implanted a universal translation? In hindsight they don't really benefit anything from giving a specimen a chance to expose them using their language.
3. Gushing
The setting and worldbuilding as of right now is definitely my cup of tea ("kidnapped by wolf men"), and Vaast...Ok but the size diff tho... I need him, I need him bad >.<
Repost cuz I realized I wrote on the wrong page lol
Very good feedback, it's appreciated :)
The dialogue in quotations without a speaker is meant to be intentional internal dialogue between Goober (Noah) and the AI, distinct from his internal thoughts/narrator. Is there a more intuitive way to indicate this? In contrast the rest of the spoken dialogue doesn't use quotes
The way you are currenly formatting it, I seperated the narration from MC's thoughts completely since there's "I thought" at the end of the internal monologue with the AI.
If there are 2 types of thoughts, one expressed through narration and one expressed through dialogue then I don't think there's a more intuitive way to it. I suppose a "I nearly jump as the AI responds to my thoughts." in the first interaction along with subtle reminders like "I'm still not used to the whole mind speaking thing." is ok enough.
Another thing about the formating, you could bold/italic all dialogues between MC and AI instead of quotation marks and ofc, show MC as the speaker to make it clearer, but that's just imo.
Yes time for some reading!!!!
Great start so far. Looking forward to more.
The premise is intriguing lets see where it take ya
Yall go read it now. It's out and proud~
Yes Daddy
Been waiting. Time to see the fruity men in action
only a few more days to go
Will this be available for android?
Yes, this will be available on PC, Mac and mobile.
Intriguing, something will definitely check out
And morning deals time for me so can make a day of it
This looks promising, I'm excited to give it a read!!!<3
We are glad you think so and hope that you enjoy it when it launches.
Eagerly looking forward to this VN.
Thank you very much for the interest, we aim to please